adieu (rough cut) prod. by menthol slim

Started by Narsh, Sep 25, 2015, in Creative Add to Reading List

  1. Narsh
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    Sep 25, 2015


    all ive done today is this.

    lyrics:
    torn rose on the floor and more i see through flares of all your evening stares
    sunlight shining there and where were you when i had moves to grow
    and strewn my truth along the coast
    i almost feel sorry i didnt mean to say that
    aint patient just bold and since boast and got penchant for pendants and painting the truth as a hoax

    i bid you adieu, i do

    coming off of a binge i got karma in me
    i am the vengeance of armaments men
    and women had chalked up to valor
    im candid my candor aint planned it
    fantastic this banter
    im chandler im joey im ross at a loss
    all my friends since been b------s
    im pensive and petty
    can’t write for a second ‘fore lightening come wrecks it
    i aint trying make sense but the clarity enters
    i bid you adieu cause you stared through december
    not sayin a word but whats worse was the measure
    of intellect it took shun me forever
    mommy whats pleasure
    finding its difficult
    that i can tell ya
    memorabilia medical
    fella
    felt the roof
    crumble from pressure
    plunge into better
    found plunder in endings
    and this just beginnings

    i bid you adieu, i do

    coming off of a binge im on toxins again
    all of this chalk it to uppers and SWIM
    swimming in meds
    someone i met
    remain anonymous
    remain anonymous

    someone i met
    remain anonymous

    dont tell their name
    or call it quits
    dont tell their kids
    help hide their frame
    dont rip their reins
    be diligent everyone got their own pain
    place pics in place
    pictures in frame
    dont sip the same

    this is so fire i called all my friends
    to tell em im rappin im rappin like them
    rapping like him following trends ugh
    i just realized what i mightve just said
    f---, im trapped in this pit
    up, lazarus lift
    me

    im bane of existing
    and cane is whats missing
    im able to sniff things
    they aint gonna miss me
    its nifty im nuclear
    and imma s---t em up
    and in the veins in my veins
    imma s---t em up
    im up lookin @ the moon in love
    im lookin all at the moon in love
    i got the lunar lunacy

    tho all my dawgs they act new to me ay
    those are my dawgs thought they knew its me ay
    i thought i thought they knew its me ay
    but they act knew to me oi
    neuter em neuter em ay
    tell em now tell em now tell em now ay
    that we aint play, that we aint play
    f--- what you say
    ay


    i bid u adieu i do i do

    @CreativeSXN
     
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  2. Cyreides
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    Cyreides gfy

    Sep 25, 2015
    think this would've benefited from a slower and more relaxed flow and a softer, less thug style delivery
     
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  3. FreeAgent
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    FreeAgent Resurrected like Jesus

    Sep 25, 2015
    Second
     
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  4. Narsh
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    Sep 25, 2015
    i never feel confident enough to tone it down tbh lol
    whatd you think
     
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  5. FreeAgent
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    FreeAgent Resurrected like Jesus

    Sep 25, 2015
    Friends reference :banderas:
    Cain and Abel reference :banderas:

    Really enjoyed this. Bumping again rn
     
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  6. Cyreides
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    Cyreides gfy

    Sep 25, 2015
    i've told u b4 i think ur slower flow/relaxed normal voice is fine

    i also prefer it to the thuggish biting since it's actually u
     
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  7. Narsh
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    [/QUOTE]
    i wouldnt say this is biting but i get what you're saying man

    i just feel like the normal me is too boring
     
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  8. Cyreides
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    Cyreides gfy

    Sep 25, 2015
    nah
     
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  9. Narsh
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    Sep 25, 2015
    cultured :emoji_sunglasses:

    :wiggins:
     
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  11. Narsh
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    Sep 25, 2015
    Hi guys listen 2 dis pls
     
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  12. Ordinary Joel
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    Ordinary Joel Happiness begins when selfishness ends

    Sep 26, 2015
    Second verse delivery was niceeeeeeeeeeeee.
     
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  13. Narsh
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    Sep 26, 2015
    Yeah the second half of the song is so much better than the first...I really should've made it more even lol
     
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  15. Narsh
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    Sep 26, 2015
    I never pointed out how my 2nd verse on this is basically addressing ur thug biting comment hahah
     
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  16. Narsh
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    Sep 26, 2015
    I bid you adieuuuu I do I do
     
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  17. YaBoyTr
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    Sep 26, 2015
    I liked this one too. The vocals is way too loud though, its overpowering the beat. Your flow was interesting and i didnt mind it but i see what @Cyreides is saying by a more relaxing flow would fit better on this beat
     
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  18. Narsh
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    Sep 26, 2015
    word vocals are too strong, you're right


    the 2nd half of this track is one of my favorite things ive done recently...for some reason i cant get that bit from 3:23-3:25 out of my head where the "aideu, i do i doOO" shifts pitches

    it sounds so good to me :allears:

    first half of the track is rough af tho
     
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  19. mow
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    mow long live flippa

    Sep 26, 2015
    This is really f---ing good:emoji_fire:
     
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  20. Narsh
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    Sep 26, 2015
    f--- im glad you liked it man!! i always appreciate people who arent creative section regulars stopping by to post their thoughts
     
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